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I like this story so much I printed it off and have it on my bookshelf. Hope you don't mind awfully. :P It is truly excellent though. I would be so bold as to say you are the best author I've read on Yiffstar.


I really enjoyed this story, it had pretty much all I could ever look for in a story. Good character development, good story and very well written.... I could go on forever, but I'll stop there.

Keep up the good work.


urr... I dunno if this shows up as I think it will, but I forgot to add that it this is, by far, the best story that I've read up to date.


urr... I dunno if this shows up as I think it will, but I forgot to add that it this is, by far, the best story that I've read up to date.


Simply romantic. Chaotic at forst with confusion wonderfuly blended with desire and love.....I have to say..this story was beutiful...and im going to read the other 4 new ones ^.=.^


I hate the word "paw" used in replacement of the word "hand," it actually makes me mentally scream out "HAAAAAAAND," with that extended sound and totally brings me out of the story. When I read, I get so much into a story I forgot I'm in a real world and all that exists is the text I'm reading, but "paw" is one of the words that brings me back to reality, which is a bad thing.

But other than that, this story rocks. I stayed up until 4:32 AM reading this, although I was staying up for other reasons, this definitely helped make a few hours much more enjoyable.


I hate the word "paw" used in replacement of the word "hand," it actually [...] totally brings me out of the story.

Funny, that's the same reaction I have to the word "hand" in furry stories. :D To each his own...


Well, hands have the ability to open doors and hold on to things easier due to opposable digits. Paws, like, can't, so it just puts a stupid image in mind.


I personally agree with Kyell ;D
It just doesn't sound right in context if they say hand. At that point I usually rip my hair out. Or just leave.


Wow. Probably the best story I've ever read here! Your characters are full and real, and the plot actually has depth and meaning. Not to mention that I didn't notice a SINGLE grammatical error, which made the story very easy to read and that much more enjoyable.

I can't wait to read more of your work! Great job! 11/10! ^^


Wow. That is a touching story. You are an excellent writer. Not only is the story great, but you got some really good differences of culture in a furry world, like the aquatic races having their own pool and combing fur. Most people don't mention that. Keep up the good work.


The only word needed to describe this story is: Amazing. You portrayed the characters amazingly. I truly found myself immersed in the world you painted so vividly on my computer screen. Easily the best story I have read to date. 10/10


Wow, all I can say is wow..
no one word can describe the myriad of emotions that came to me as I read this story. This is by far the best short story I've ever read on here or any where else. I'm absolutely blown away by this, I can say that while reading it I didn't want it to end but when it did come I felt that the ending couldn't have been any better.

The characters were so incredibly well thought out and defined that I felt as if they were real. The imagery and detail that go into the settings, characters, and plot are just amazing. I wish I could go on but I've stayed up later than I should reading this story, it drew me in and I couldn't stop.

Thank you so much for writing this, its made my day, well days seeing as its spanned across two days! ;)


Two things strike me as outstanding about this piece. It's excellent overall, but these particularly grabbed my attention:

The first is the actual plot, tied in with the characterisation. Everyone is very believable. So is Kory's confused journey of self-discovery. This is the sort of thing that makes me look back with regret on my own solitary, uninteresting teenage years, and makes me love teen fic.

The second is the way species are integrated into the world. The well-to-do otter woman looking down her nose at the strongly-scented fox (not that otters are likely to have that much room to complain, especially given vulpine noses), and the very design of the Hedleys' home... Nicely tied in.

It does leave me with unanswered questions - are they so sure Kory's mother wouldn't notice anything? What about that group Father Joe referred him to? (And kudoes to showing the good side of the church, by the way; if people like him were more visible I wouldn't distrust organised religion so much. But I digress) - but then, I think any good story leaves its readers wondering, 'What next?'

Because in a good story, the characters feel real - and real life doesn't just trail into a vapid "happily ever after".


I agree with everything here.

Especially the kudos about the Church. Although most priests are not nearly as supportive of the lifestyle, in my experience, there are very few that have hatred towards those of us with different preferences.

It's good to see the Church portrayed in a positive light in this genre. (To tell the truth, I usually stop reading stories once religion is mentioned--they usually turn into a diatribe about how evil religion is. But the story was so well written that I continued anyway. I'm glad I did.)

Wonderful writing, "mainstream" quality. A definite five stars.


I couldn't agree more with Veritas. Probably one of the best, definitely one of the most believable stories I have ever read.

Another note, a lot of stories like this (self-discovery, coming out, call it what you will) seem to make it look as though the entire world is against the characters- I think it only added to the story's quality when characters like Nick and Father Joe offered support.

And this story leads rather well into the next installment, too. :) Incredibly well done, 5/5 no question.


This is hands-down the best story i have read So far.

I agree with the second paragraph [)points to the post above(]


Yeah, well in some towns, it really feels that way. Chicago is WAY easier than Southern Pennsylvania. Depends on family and friends, and township, I guess. I ain't coming out for NOBODY! -- well, OK the wife knows, and a friend in Chicago. But I'm not telling anybody else in person. And deff! not the Mom. And Not the Right-Wing Fanatic-church brother. He loves me, but he loves me straight. I'm not willing to trust him to come out to.


this really is a great story. excelently writen. only thing i couldnt understand is how the pool would lead into the basement with out it flooding due to gravity.... thats my only real concern with story and keep up the great work


Heh, realized that that this post might still cause some confusion. Water can only flow where pressure is not equal. If you hold a bottle of water upside down, it will suck air in before it will let water out (causing the bubbles). If you stick a water bottle upside down in another body of water, the water will not drain because there is no change in pressure. Gravity and the weight of the atmosphere on the lower body of water prevents water levels from rising, even if there is more water above it.

It's the same principle that makes those self-refilling pet water dishes work

http://zedomax.com/blog/wp-content/uploads/2008/06/pet-water-bowl-toilet.jpg


Oh, I forgot to add, this story was really, really fantastic! The good syntax and the believable characters certainly made this into a memorable piece! Onwards to the rest of Kyell's story gallery!


Absolutely amazing!

Took a while to read, but that's ok :3

You have amazing talent, and I'll have to read your other pieces!


This is a wonderful story, Love it!


This has to be my favourite story so far. It's lovely. The story flows lovely and the characters are very believable. Also there intimacy is loving and that I really like. I can't work what I mean very well. but I love this so very much


Thanks so much! Check out the sequel, "Streams," posted here in four parts, and if you like it, I hope you'll pick up the complete story, which will be published in January at Further Confusion by Sofawolf Press. :)


Amazing story!! So worth the four hours it took me to read it! I already read it like 5 days ago(and Streams too), and I HAD to make an account to tell you how great it is! 5/5.

It has a great story and a great plot. :3


Now, to start off, this story was probrubly one of the best I have ever read. Infact I would even go as to say it should be published, and in its current format and style, would be fairly approprait.

As for the plot, it was amazing, so deep, and realistic as to how somthing really could happen. Almost like you based this off of somthing that realy DID happen!

My only gripe would have to be, and hear me out. Not that I am a perv or anything, or a fur that has to have sticky hardcore yiff when ever he reads a story, but I would'nt have read the entire thing if I was, since early on it was easy to tell how to describe serton "bits"

Out of most of everything else, you were extreamily vauge when it came to that, I mean at some points I had to read some parts a couple times to make sure that you were referancing "bits". And when the scene actualy did come, I had to use my imagenation abit more then I thought, and even then I had alittle trouble since you were vauge on basicly everything. I mean did the fox have a sheath? was he anatomicly correct? And when it came to there release, it didnt seem as special as it should have bin. Like it was a part you just kinda wanted to get done and over with.

Now theres nothing wrong with that in reality, but I am just trying to state alittle of the problems a reader might have had with it.

But I give this story a 5/5, no dought one of the more grabbing stories I have read on here.


A friend recommended this story to me, so I thought I would give it a read. It was very well written. ^-^ Loved the characters, and the ending was very romantic. I was told there was a sequel too, so I'll be off reading that now. Thank you kindly. ^-^


i love it...from beginning to end, beautiful prose and plot


Adorable story, amazing writing. I cannot express my appreciation with mere words so I'll just give you a hug! *hugs* :3
One thing that really caught my attention was indeed the church. Upon its first mentioning in the plot, I have to say I thought it'd end up some way or another being awfully mean to Kory and make his confusion only worse. I'm not an atheist myself or have anything against anyone's religion, it's just how the church (and its members) is usually portrayed. It's really refreshing to see this... different, altough possible, point of view. すごい!


Thanks so much! I'm glad that you appreciated the portrayal of the Church. I wanted to make it balanced: not an extreme of positive or negative, as it so often is in fiction. Hope you continue to enjoy the writing!


It's been a while since I first read this, but I still have to say that it is the best story I've read on this site, bar none. Everything about it just feels natural.


It's been a while since I first read this, but I still have to say that it is the best story I've read on this site, bar none. Everything about it just feels natural.


Thanks, I appreciate that! The complete story (Aquifers is part 1) is now available over on the Sofawolf Press site at http://www.sofawolf.com/catalog/product_info.php?products_id=81 if you want to read it, plus John Cooner did some terrific illos for it... :)


It's not my intention to rant, but I think I'm going to anyways. Your diction and sentence structure are amazing. This is so far the best M/M story I've read; it all seems to just flow naturally from the third person limited point of view, connecting readers with Kory, instead of the way most of the stories around here are choppy and change point of view every paragraph. It's also really nice to see a story written in SAE, one that actually seems like it took time and effort both in writing and revising to create. I also like how subtle everything is, the way things can be described wonderfully without too much direct explanation, and how most things aren't stated blatantly with a cause clearly written; there are many implications which wouldn't be present with many authors. The characters, too, seem to be almost real people. They are easy to imagine and mostly round, with few if any stereotypes. Overall, this story is definitely worth the time it will take to read it. Thank you for posting this sample (5/5).


Holy Crap this is good. This is better than Gold, more like Platnum. I am so buying the book from Sofawolf press. Great job, I applaud you.


I've been reading this story on and off for a week now. Though I've yet to finish it, I just had to take some time to say just how much I'm loving it! Your style of writing, metaphors... everything; It's simply captivating.


Oh man, i just wanna tell you how funnily similar the beginning was to something that happened to me a while back.something almost identical happened to me at the community pool... without the whole... other guy hitting on me thing. And my mom is EXACTLY the same as Kory's with the tiny exeption of the churchgoing thing.
I am very grateful for this story for both its length and how wonderfully it flowed. took me 3 hours to read but... it was worth it. if its ok, id like to print this out and show it to a few of my friends. you are an amazing writer and i believe you deserve more then just a few kind words from this site. you could make hundreds, possibly thousands selling this stuff man.
Now for an actual review... The story flowed extremely nicely. there was a beautiful plot and great charecter development. the story had the ONE thing that all great ones do too... an ending that leaves you wanting more...
To agree with a previous reviewer:

"I hate the word "paw" used in replacement of the word "hand," it actually makes me mentally scream out "HAAAAAAAND," with that extended sound and totally brings me out of the story. When I read, I get so much into a story I forgot I'm in a real world and all that exists is the text I'm reading, but "paw" is one of the words that brings me back to reality, which is a bad thing.

But other than that, this story rocks. I stayed up until 4:32 AM reading this, although I was staying up for other reasons, this definitely helped make a few hours much more enjoyable."

I do very much agree with this, it does seem horribly odd to hear paw instead of hand in things "i could use a paw" and stuff like that.
There were also quite a few things that made me giggle really heavily. stuff like pounce pounce revolution. man there was quite a few cute things in there.
All in all this was an amazing story. please, if you can grant a small request, think about furthering this story's umm... story. Go further into their relation, tell about what they do after their first time, How they keep the secret of break it, add some other twists into it, you know, that sort of stuff. ill be reading it SO fast.
Also... this is one story i AM going to have to read a second time... i was a bit, distracted by a certain crushed finger the first time thorugh as my industrial painkiller wore off so i didnt quite absorb everything. Also......... would i be able to hear that poem if youve written it at all? i would love to hear it.


Actually, if you go to www.sofawolf.com when the site is back up, check under my name in the catalog list and look for "Waterways." This story, the sequel, and the conclusion are packaged together in a trade paperback with illustrations.

And feel free to keep an eye on my LiveJournal (kyellgold.livejournal.com) or my FA account (Kyell) for more news about my writing. Thanks for the comment and the appreciation! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. :) I don't have the entire poem written, but I'll be sure to post it on LJ or FA if I ever do.


A very special account of the rite of passage all young gay males must face.

Masterfully portrayed, thank you for sharing it with us.


Just finished reading Waterways, borrowed the hard copy from a local fur friend. I was ...amazed, to say the very least. Few books have gotten such an emotional reaction out of me. I am very impressed. Kudos, good sir, you are awesome =3


Very much appreciated! Thanks for the kind words. :)


Right as I read "Go, you Idiot" after Samaki's questions about Kory's father, Pandora (web radio) started 'Brighter Than Sunshine' By Aqualung. My heart was aching from the romance I felt. Thank you so much for the amazing read Kyell!


Oh...my..god...
This story is so beautiful, so incredibly great written, I just can't put it into words.
I was astonished how I could identify with Kory, asking the question of his sexuality, how realistic it was and yet just lovely.
I simply can't say another thing, my mind blown away.

6/5 if it existed!



I like totally have to read it now!


I love this story. The way you graw the picture of gay people's problems with words leaves me speechless. I am having simular problems myself and i find it easier to deal with them when i read. Seeing such stuff from different points of view is beautifull.
As soon as i get some money I will be sure to buy your books.


Absolutely amazing.

This is a nice refreshing story. The recurring themes in it are brought out well and in a pleasing and likable way. The silencing effect of water and that same weightlessness that you can get when laying with some people.

It was actually clever to include the checkers comment, how his red siblings wouldn't play with the black pieces. A small detail that makes the family seem more real.

A few of the furversions of different things seemed a little forced and silly, such as the game and the Schwarzenegger reference. They weren't altogether wrong, but they seemed a little unnatural.

Despite this, the story deserves a solid 5 for the cleverly orchestrated internal struggle. The priest wasn't a bible-thumper really, which is a great thing to read. Instead of turning the church into a looming figure it was presented in a caring way that in the end lead to a better understanding on Kory's part. All in all, an excellent read and well-deserving of it's recommendation.

~W.A.F.


Damn, I'm not even sure what to say.

Though I usually don't comment on the story directly, but the homes were very creative and very well described. Very few people know of black foxes (nicknamed "Silver Foxes" if I remember correctly), and least of all that these foxes are usually born among a litter of same average-furred foxes.

I thought my writing was good but this puts my most prized stories to shame (none can be found on YS, only rough drafts). It might take me a while to regain my motivation to work on them again, and yes I do blame you, and your excellent writing skills ;-P

It took me four hours to read this story, since I didn't want to miss any of it. I will definately be looking forward to reading more of your stories.
Thank you for writing this story and sharing it with all of us freely.


Thanks! I appreciate you taking the time to comment on this story. It remains one of my favorites of my own work.

The sequel to this one is up here on Yiffstar; the complete story (all three parts) is available as a book from Sofawolf Press at www.sofawolf.com, whenever you're ready to read more. :)


that was amamzing. best thing I've read since the harry potter serries.


I read this story a long time ago befor i decided to be come a member of yiffstar, im glad i found it again becuse it is such a every good read and i commend you on your story telling skills.


This is by far the best story I have read on Yiffstar, DA, FA, any where. I fell in love with this story when I was less than a quarter of the way in, It made me laugh so hard that I started to hic-up, it made me so frustraited that I had to go punch my punching bag a few times, (this is a compliment), It made my heart warm and fuzzy to the point that I nearly cried (This is a accomplishment in itself)
I applaud you on your writing skills and I look forward to reading the rest of your storys.

Thus, because I am a naturally affectionate person, *Hugs* I only give hugs to those that have earned my respect, ^^


The most beautiful story ever


What an incredibly sweet story... really loved it. You're a fantastic writer, Kyell. :3


I bought the book on sofawolf, loaned it to a friend after reading it several times, and only just got it back now... after 4 months. He wouldnt return it to me until he'd read it about 8 times :) Absolutely AMAZING book...


Aw, that's great to hear, but he should get his own copy. :) They'll be back on sale Jan. 31 or so at Sofawolf's site. Glad you guys liked it! (that goes for you folks up there I haven't gotten a chance to reply to personally, too--I appreciate all the comments!)


Wow, nearly 100 votes.

Just read it again and it still made me feel all good inside.

Little upset cause the copy my friend bought for my birthday got lost in transit -huff- But he's getting a P.O. box and another copy. I really, really, really wanna find out how it 'ends' (or if it ends or whatever...)

One of the few stories I could actually go back and read again and again and again and still want to keep reading every time.

How old is the story now? Four... five years old?

With All Fondness,
~WhiteArcticFox


You have a really good writing style. And you should keep it up. Though it's strange to be reading this story online the day that I got the copy of "Out of Position I ordered." Guess now I'll have to buy "Water ways." Keep writing, few people on this site have the ability to make me read a story that long without having it filled with yiff, or me skipping to those parts. You have a great talent, don't let it go to waste.


You know, i have always wanted Kyell Golds books, and i went to Barnes and Nobles to search for it. no luck
Today, i read this, took four hours, and i was hooked, couldnt stop reading it. i was drawn into it and felt the otters pain and confusion, and happiness, and i was thinking, Wow! this story is so wonderfully written. now i look back up and i find out its Kyell.
hah, wow, so cool. this is a five star read, and i must definatly find more!
creative, evocative, and rewarding, it leaves you with a warm happy feeling in the end.
Thank You.


Aw, thanks! For the record, you can find my books at sofawolf.com/catalog and at Amazon.com. Glad you enjoyed the stories and hope you continue to do so! :)


Strange Magic is my favorite song of all time. Everything else I can say has already been said by others. You don't disappoint.


I just had to reread this for about the tenth time or so, and it's still just as great. I'm all excited because I ordered the book a few days ago, and I hope it gets here soon. ^.^
I love the way you give your characters such deep personalites and emotions. It's always really realistic.

Because I have a habit of rambling like a crazed fan, I'll shut my muzzle now. X3

Keep writing,
Rachek


Bravo sir. It is very rare to find a story that I find very touching. With this being your first work I have viewed I am thoroughly impressed. I tip my hat to you.


Truly...amazing. Your story is perfect in every way. Trust my judgement, you're the best author on YIFFSTAR. You make me want to be a better writer. In comparison, my stories blow horses!


(not that that's a BAD thing, but you know what I mean)


Great story! I cant wait to finally pick up a copy.

Also, i had a burning question. Are the hardcore gamers, Jason and Dev the same characters that are in 'Out of Position'?

Anyways, great stuff man! = )
Cheers!


Heh. That would be no. :)


I've read this maybe 4 times now. Each and every time they walk to Starbucks, Rainbow Veins - Owl City plays in my head. I love this story so much, I bought my own copy of the book, and I can easily say it was worth every penny! :)


Hey, just rereading again, and i remembered something i wanted to ask a long while back:

Is this a real city or is it fictional, and if it's fictional is it modeled off, say, orange county? It just seems like most of the locations match up. I get this weird feeling whenever i read this that i've walked down these streets and seen those places. Kinda cool, kinda frustrating.

Thanks in advance.

Run Rampant, mind the Silence,

SILENTrampancy

PS Buying the book as soon as i set up my bank account and get some cash in my pockets. I've procrastinated on acting like an adult long enough.


It is a fictional city. There's a map in OOP and linked from Anthro #24 (I think it is--the one with my story in it). Basically it more or less maps to Milwaukee. But it can be Orange County if you want it to be. :)


I must say that is THE best story that I have ever had the pleasure of reading, and yes, it was a pleasure to read. I read this story about 3 years ago and it always stuck with me, I was that in love with it. The characters are so lovable and everything that happens is so believable that it's not something that one can forget.

So three years later, I finally get to say, "Thank You."


You're welcome! :) Thanks for your comment and I'm so happy to hear you liked it.


I LOVED this. it is sooooo cute ^_^
fav and 5/5


wow, this is probably the best story i've ever read on this site (single story at least) props to you, 5/5 *instant favorite*


First off, I would like to know what this is:

"...Though I did put my paw on his tail. And he put his arm around me. Kind of. But that was all casual..."

...Wait, what? Secondly, You have earned my very rare rating of 5/5. I make a point to next to never give out high ratings unless the story/art exceeds my expectations. My god, man. Stop being so good! You make me look like crap! >_< Anyway, very good. I plan to spread this around.

We met at Rainfurrest, if you can remember the Unsheathed you did there.


Finnally, I demand the rest of Escaping Seattle!! DEMAND IT!!!


First off, I would like to know what this is:

"...Though I did put my paw on his tail. And he put his arm around me. Kind of. But that was all casual..."

...Wait, what? Secondly, You have earned my very rare rating of 5/5. I make a point to next to never give out high ratings unless the story/art exceeds my expectations. My god, man. Stop being so good! You make me look like crap! >_< Anyway, very good. I plan to spread this around.

We met at Rainfurrest, if you can remember the Unsheathed you did there.


Finnally, I demand the rest of Escaping Seattle!! DEMAND IT!!!


Heh, I remember you from RF. I don't know if I'll write any more of Escaping Seattle--that was specific to the RF storyline. But maybe, if North thinks it's okay...

And I appreciate the rating and the kudos! You can see the next part online here at http://www.yiffstar.com/?pid=20718 ... and if you like that, the book "Waterways" has the complete story, and is available at Sofawolf's website. :)


Orly? Trying to sell me stuff? You crafty... Thing. Uh... Damnit. Memory failure.


my fav story on this site, period!


I read this quite some time ago, and suddenly it was at the top of the list! Fond memories, it was a great read.


omg, brilliant


An awesome story.
I lol when he was arguing with his inner self ^^


who would have thought that if you look at the top of the popular stories page, you would find the best furry story ever? XD

took me 3 days to read and caused me great concentration loss during those days thinking about what was going to happen, but TOTALLY worth it!


Aw, thanks! Check out the sequels if you liked this one. I hope you continue to enjoy them. :)


Wow....That was amazing.....I went through all the things Kory went through, so this story means a lot to me... I'm definately buying this book now!

-TsukiShiro


Thanks so much! Hope you enjoy the rest of it. :)


How could i not? I'll be buying "Waterways" within the next few days. You are such an amazing writer, and honestly, you have been one of my main role models for a few years now. *blushes* I want to be a writer as good as you one day.

-TsukiShiro


Had to read this story again i just had to and its really cute the way these to meet and end up being together...I loves this so much.
My favorite character is Samaki for many reasons....i will say one.He is a FOX!!!! XD


Though old and outdated, this story remains one of my favorites on SF. It's one of the few I've read that show the power of verisimilitude.


Oh my Jesus, kyell. This is such a cute story. <3 I don't really have much criticism to give you, because I'm not that great at writing, but I can say I'll be looking forward to maybe a sequel. :3 keep up the stellar work!


Wait no longer! http://sofurry.com/page/20718/ and the full novel at http://www.sofawolf.com/catalog/product_info.php?cPath=37&products_id=81

Guess I should update the header to this, huh?


I see you have done so!
If i had two pennies to rub together, i'd really buy all yer novels, but... nothin. x3
Inspired to draw a scene out of this. Or a little scene of my own with these two.
Maybe... under that bridge holding onto eachother? I dunno if there's lights or not...


Im pretty sure your tired of hearing this but i loved the story and Im usually against foxes being bottems in ways but im glad to have a Fox like Samaki being the one who is nice and sweet and cares for others like all foxes should do


I've been told this story is essential reading for any aspiring furry writer, so I took the time to read through it last night and this morning. I wasn't disappointed. I was particularly impressed by your dialog and story pacing. Yes, it was a long story, but you managed to keep my interest by making these scenes interesting, and often relevant to the story as a whole, even if only from a metaphorical angle. I also appreciated the sophisticated use of literary devices like foreshadowing, as well as the way you used the poem as a kind of framework for the different parts of the story. I also had the sense, while reading this story, that many of the events and emotions you were writing about were personal. Which speaks of an amazing capacity to empathize with your characters, which in turn is transferred to the reader.

Finally, I thought the way you presented the actual sex was tasteful and romantic. At some points, I felt like you were being intentionally, even frustratingly coy, but I think it worked well for this kind of story. Rather than making the climax of the story the sex act, the peak of the action was Kory's final decision to make the move and try something with Samaki.

If I had to pick out one thing that I wished was a little different, it would be some of the detail. While I did gain insight into the world you created for these characters, and I was never bored, certain scenes seemed to go on a little too long while having little relevance to the story. The best example of this was the "Pounce Pounce Revolution" scene. Though it was interesting to see this alternate version of DDR, I didn't learn much about Samaki and his family that I didn't already know from other scenes. Nevertheless, I still think this story was amazing. I'm looking forward to reading reading the continuation.


Goodness! My thanks for such a well-thought-out, detailed review! I'm quite pleased you enjoyed the story, and took the time to write about it.

I have heard that comment about the PPR scene (and others) in the past, and actually debated taking it out when I published it in its book form. Ultimately, opinions were split between people who enjoyed the scene because it was fun and rounded out the world, and people who felt it didn't add much to the story. I liked building up the world, and so I left some of the world-building in here and there. It detracts from the tightness of the story, but provides a little more texture to the world, which I felt like I could get away with in a fantasy setting.

That said, I think there's less of that in "Streams" and "Oceans." :)

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