Well! I'm a Pokemon fic writer for now, because I like the universe, but the Anime makes me want to go swallow a bowl of razor blades... >.>
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Thank you so much for the (unexpectedly large) reply!!!! >w< You seriously just made my shit day exponentially better!
I can honestly say that I'm pumped for the revamp! Your writing skills ARE in fact awesomeness of a higher order ( stayed up till 6 one night when I first got into it!) and I believe wholeheartedly that you'll do great in the rewrite.
Having said that I await with bated breath your Tremmi on Gilte action in the new version. (though I wouldn't say it would have been putting a diamond on shit XD)
To be less fan-boyish (as my girlfriend called it.) I would love to give my input if it helps in any way! I'm no good at writing a fiction on my own believe me I've tried and yours was the inspiration! (also Bleach lol) But I couldn't get past the opening xp
I hate starting things, but editing and rephrasing are two things I have a passion for. (that and argumentative speeches)
Yeah i didn't think you would mind the typos too much ^w^(They annoyed me to no end when I read the alpha chapters, I ended up building an immunity though lol)
As for skype I don't have a mic/camera set but I'll get one eventually.
anyway, you can reach me via email email@example.com or here if you want to send me some stuff for feedback. ^w^
your fan, the deceivingly named, super nerd- AggroAggron.
P.S. Spent 30 min. rereading this comment. <--then after writing that sentence went over it for another ten. lol so OCD.
P.P.S. Nerded-the-fuck out when I read your reply!!! >///< (damn my girlfriend was right!)
Buwahahaha. :D Made me burst out giggling reading your comment. Not in a bad way mind you, but it's so full of... *pauses* hm... I guess the only word I can find that fits, is excitement? Can't find a damn word for it! Argh! *rips hair out*
I always tend to talk a TAD too much... so yes. Get used to crazy huge replies, especially when it's something I'm passionate about! ;) Glad it cheered you up, hearing people still loving the series encourages me in ways you can't understand in return. I don't write to 'appease' fans - but hearing their excitement that I myself share for what I do, just makes all that work, that much more worth it!
On that note, I can say without ego or pride, Sabetha was indeed a huge success despite its 'failures' (sloppy story progress, typos, yada yada). As I only really posted the story on AGN.PH - before the site went kablewy! I had (according to their sources) over 420,000 views and a 4.9/5 rating across the story. AGN.PH is a small site of course, but with arguably at least 5-10k unique viewers (cautious estimates), and none felt hateful enough to give negative reviews or similar, meaning at the very least, the story was 'decent'. Still shocked to see the 420k+ views... mainly as it shows people didn't just read 1 chapter and leave - but many folks read dozens of them. :) It's kind of what inspired me to keep going as a writer - as well as the fan's who I gained and their encouragement!
Tremi and Gilte's 'arc' is... a masterpiece to my eyes. I can't imagine anything more fitting, or perfect to setup it all up and conclude it. The story, the emotion, the bonding, the smut (romantic smut :P), all of it flows so... beautifully. I really can't wait to get to it and write it! :)
Hahaha, your girlfriend is a slave master! Rise against her, my fanatic fan! Defeat your oppressors! :O... Ok, more seriously. Writing stories many people think is easy as writing a story. Until they try it themselves... and they realize there's so many freakin' rules, requirements, limitations, and similar things that really can smack a new writer in the face and stop them in their tracks (happened, and still is to me :P). Openings especially, are a bitch (excuse meh french ;p), as they really make or break your story. You could write the most amazing story ever - but if the opening doesn't grab the reader and make them curious/excited to continue reading, a good chunk will stop. The first 20 pages is what needs to grab readers interest, and that's damn hard, as you can't give away 'juicy bits' off the start, or else your story falls apart! I ALWAYS struggle with openings, hahaha >.<
Editing and rephrasing I can see from your further below comments, are indeed an OCD for you ;) That's a good thing though, as that's my weakness. I love to write write write!... but I hate re-reading my work and altering it. I wanna go go go, not go, stop, waste 5 hours re-reading/editing a chapter, then MAYBE start the next. When i get inspired, I don't stop. I just write and write and write and write... so yes! We have see a nice partnership in that department pop up, especially if you can be critical and ruthless in a constructive way, as that's what I lack - someone to berate me for flaws and errors, how I could do something better, etc. I can't realize my own flaws - as I dont' see them as flaws until someone points them out! :)
I mind typos A LOT. They drive me freakin' crazy, and I know in the earlier days of Sabetha, I used to Capitalize Ever Odd Word Without A Real Reason Or Idea When To Capitalisee Wods or mispelt commmon wods. ;) I'm proud to say I generally have smashed the capitalization issue, and am more anal about correcting typos as I go along. Not perfect, but they should be much more clear!
Skype wise, I use it for messages - not camera. I don't like talking on webcams (had bad incidents when I was younger >.>) - I just find it easier to talk back and forth via a messenger, why I offered. :)
E-mail is noted, sending an e-mail to confirm you got it right! ;)
Super Nerd? is that like a super villian? :O Then we need to find a super-jock to fight you!
Hehehehe. As I mentioned earlier, your OCD is exactly what my weakness is, it's quite funny. ;D
Buwahahaha. ;D if it helps, I nerd the fuck out when writing replies myself. I love talking with fans about it, and it really fires up my spirit when I hear from fans, especially feeding off their excitement and excitement for the story. Reminds me of the time someone came to me and revealed the 'plight' of Sabetha had reflected on their life, and stopped them commiting suicide... and it wasn't a prank. She was serious. That really touched me, and showed me how powerful the simple bond between a writer and reader truly can be in impacting others. (of course, normally it doesn't do that :P).
And off topic, I've decided to work on Sabetha's 'chapter layout', but NOT rewrite it (begin writing it as an official rewrite) for a while. WHy? I haven't 'written properly' in over a year, due to my self-loathing and dislike of my writing skills. I'm rusty as hell, and need to get my self re-sharpened for writing naturally. I don't want to do a 'slacky' job on the rewrite, as yeah. I'm not redoing this a third time ;p.
So! Instead, I've decided I will begin my second Pokemon story! Only nicknamed the 'Pokemon Academy' at this time. It takes place in an 'alternate universe' to Sabetha, the anime, etc. Generally, it falls under a classical 'universe' - Humans exist a bit more advanced then say the anime or game (leaning a bit more to how we exist in real life, but a good bit less in the expansionism side), Pokemon exist similar to the anime/games/etc all over the world, Anthro's don't exist - it's all very realistic.
Our story takes place with a company (yay, the big, evil corporation! it works so well ;p) who is a major influence in the world, the main producer of many products for humans and Pokemon alike, generally viewed in a good light as a humble, good willed company... of course, they have 'darker' researches, one of which led to a terrible accident spilling the contaminants into a major river on one of the continents. (Gonna summarize this or else i'm gonna talk for 5 hours :P).
Super long story short: Contaminants spilled into water. Certain Pokemonz with a certain gene, who got infected by such contaminants, began to 'rapidly evolve' (think Pokerus lore). This gives rise to our anthro-like critters (I know it's cliche, but sue me ;p). This of course, sparks a world wide outrage. Company needs to solve this - instead of exterminating them, instead gathers them, and brings them to a 'special' island in the ocean they had been specially designing for 'research on Pokemon' - hosting dozens of unique environments on it all artificially made, while at the heart, an 'academy' was created - a place to bring these new 'creatures', to be taught how to integrate into human society and live alongside them (aka, teaching animals to act civilized and sentient). That's the very, VERY crude summary of it.
It's a school-life leaning story at the start, but as time goes on, darker plots begin to show their ugly heads, when some of these 'anthros' rebel against the company herding them like animals, when 'mutations' begin to run rampant (tying into mega-evolutions), as well as the horrific darker side of the companies 'intentions' for them gathering on this island, out of sight from the rest of the world... ;)
I made this after hitting a branch in Sabetha, where I was deciding if The 'Anthro' and Humans would go to war with one another, and how that would end up. But I decided against it, but liked the concept of it - as well, I remember a 'school life' leaning Fanfic when I was super young (like 12-13) how I first discovered fanfics for Pokemon in truth, and I always wanted to do one leaning towards it, finding the concept could be fun - if it had good, well built characters and some plots that evolve it beyond just that - this achieves that. :)
Anyways! Done rambling. I'll post a proper outline of the story concept when I finish it, I'll pass it to your email and/or pm ;)
Also as a small update to the perhaps 0.1 people watching this, I have begun working on a rewrite of Season 1. I've far along enough with season 2/3 for 'guidance' - I can do an official, final rewrite of season 1. Some major notes below..
~ 'Gym Battles' will be making an appearance in the story! The single one I did in the 'alpha' season 1, was very well received and after some very solid idea brainstorming, I've designed a system to add them into the story to add depth, fun, and character development (amongst other things) in with them. You'll find they're not like the game nor anime per say, but designed after my own views of gyms and battling! ;) (no, not smut :P).
To clarify a bit, gyms won't just be 'random places to battle!' - each will have their own, unique story arc behind them (similar to The Garden of Eternity and Tristian, which allows him to continue running his Gym after story events you guys know of - most of the other gyms are all new stories and characters though!)
~ The story is having its entire flow 'rebuilt'. The end chapter will be around 145-155 (about 20-30 chapters will be from new gym arcs, the other 25-35 will be from raw, new content and events to flesh out the story!)
~ Many characters who had 'personal' storys untouched (such as Elisa's past, Tremi's Family and events, etc) have either had their stories reworked, or properly fleshed out to conclude. Tremi's new 'story' as well, will conclude and add the desired 'Tremi-Gilte' romance conclusion, while giving a proper environment and place for it to occur, giving it a much more natural, and emotional flow (don't worry, the smut will be great too :P).
~ A lot of 'smutty' related events have been reworked or removed. I felt in season 1 the alpha draft, there was just too much pointless smut. Instead, it's been reworked and remastered. Each smut event should be MUCH more appealing and interesting to read (I hope!) and more pointful to the story. If I feel the need to write smut for smut sake for a scene that won't fit - I'll simply do what I did prior, and make a chapter number - .1 (chapter 9.1 or similar).
~ Tons of 'smoothing'. Elisa' trusting Sabetha so easly after a life of abuse and neglect, Sabetha and Sapphire becoming friends so easily when they just met, and other 'oddities' are being smoothed out and made to feel more natural - a fairly common complaint!
~ And tons, tonssss more.
Not to say you're going to see a surge of chapters suddenly appear! I'm at this moment, writing on a renewed 'chapter guide' - listing chapter 1-130 (atm, likely to expand as I need) and giving detailed summaries of each chapter and event, so I can easily shuffle things around in the story vs how they were in the alpha draft to how I want them now, as well as slipping in new content, etc, without committing a ton of work writing out chapters and needing to alter it. Once I do this, I'll be giving it to some close fans to review, edit, and when I'm happy - begin to hammer out drafts of the chapters properly. After I get a draft done, I'll be having a few friends/fans do a proof read, not only for writing - but for how they enjoy the story and flow of it all. I want to take my time, and ensure i get it done RIGHT this time, as I have no intentions of redoing season 1 again after this - I want to write season 2 and 3, damn it! :P
After I finish off 15-20 chapters, I'll begin to post them on here as my official 'reboot' of the story, and continue trucking out the rewrite.
If any of you guys have the skills and dedication to help me with proof reading and/or serious, helpful feedback on 'drafts' - don't be afraid to give me a pm! I Very much like working with my fans for this. :)
~ Da kat
I revamped the Sanctuary 'events' today. Holy hell... ._.; I am liking these new 'FUN' events with Zaggy, Michael, and the new additions. Seems my proof-readers do too, when I only got a response of 'hot damn x.x...' which entails their pant sizes shrunk and became unusually tight... ;)
Buwahaha, don't worry about typoes or misspellings. I'm used to that and my brain literally just automatically corrects them when I read such things. ;)
As you saw, I did get my work transferred over! I almost hesitated and went against doing so, as I actually would prefer to have a newly written, proper version of it up instead, but yes. I had enough requests to re-add it - so I did so!
The 'lemon' bit between Tremi, and Gilte (gallade :P) is indeed a major thing people have complained about, which kind of surprised me as I always took my writing for cheap, crappy, and meant for a quick read - I didn't expect readers to get so attached to characters, with it having such a deep meaning in that romance. of course, I sold myself short as I often do, and since that time, I've learned much, much more on writing in general so I can see that 'flaw' more accurately now. :)
That Lemon WON'T be coming until I rewrite season 1, mainly, as the whole flow of the story has been altered. While the story itself is generally the same - some romances, characters, events, plots, etc, have changed, been removed, or new ones entirely added to make things flow better. The story you saw was a literal alpha draft, again, a lesson I learned - don't 'wing' stories and write them as you go along without any plan! :P
Hehehe. I know that 'stigma' of Anthro's. It's often poorly used in concept, and over-done to make 'furries' happy (not that I find furries of any kind per say, bad - but from a normal person POV, they can be due to the stigma around them). That's why I tried to make them have a deep, lore-sensible root in the actual universe of Pokemon, while taking my own spin on it - which I've been told I've done very well.
As for the... 'juicy' bits, that made me blush in truth as I never really thought about others enjoying it, as I did when writing it hahaha. ;) Though, that also makes me happy as a writer to know not only in story, but in other ways, I can make the readers feel delighted and enjoy the events.
On that note, I've especially been working on 'lemony goodness' lately with my self-practicing/studying for writing, how to do it better, more sensually, more intimately, and in different ways. Sheer smut vs romantic love making, is a very key definer in that, and can be difficult at times to get across, as simple, boring lay on bed, snoo-snoo is what most see 'romance' as, yet if you go too far to the opposite, it devolves into a smutfest which kills the point of it! (not to say smugfests are bad, they just have their place as romantic, touching, lovey-dovey scenes do :P).
One major thing for season 1 in the rewrite, is I'm cutting down on a lot of the smut over-all. I felt at times, there was simply too much of it, as well, how Sabetha for example went from a total prude to a raging slut in freakin' 10 chapters felt out of place for a normal human being, and have instead staggered that and made it flow much more sensibly (and this doesn't mean it sucks, it's much more interesting watching her develop her sexuality!). Generally how I am doing 'smutty stuff' now is A) it has a story point (character bonding, romance, etc), B) it's a smut-arc, aka, the Sanctuary - where the smut is one of the main focuses of that period. So we'll have less over-all through the story, but generally, more, as it'll be congregated into larger 'blobs' of fun. Oh, and my... *rolls hand* variety of events... has improved greatly. ;) Wait till season 2, hehehe :D...
Now, more seriously. The reason I haven't continued WRITING Sabetha, is in most part, due to the inability to find and fix my own flaws in writing. I've tried multiple times to get others to help me, criticize the work, and help me become a better writer (from their perspectives of course), but always ends up with false bravado. I don't want to write, if I can't identify my own flaws and continue to improve as a writer of that makes sense. It makes me feel depressed, and kills my joy to write.
That is, to clarify, 'writing'. My STORY WRITING, the act of creating stories, events, plots, chapters, etc etc etc, has only gotten far stronger over the past few years and which is what I've focused on greatly. Improving my planning, organization skills, yada yada. Which Sabetha really reflected on the lacking of those, as I really did 'wing' most of the story, rather than plan it out. Winging it can work great! But for a story as intricate and huge as Sabetha, not so much.
I've already redone a huge majority of it. many fear me 'changing the story to something alien' - but I've tried to avoid that. Instead, I've basically tried to enhance the story without losing what made it the story you guys loved. Sapphire is still your quirky, eccentric, up-beat go happy character for example. Frinda and Lefy are still their same old. But for example, the first 10 chapters feel rushed. Going from stating a journey, to Sabetha's 'problems' rapidly getting worse and going to sheer chaos, there was no 'adventure' before the chaos started. Another point, Sabetha and Sapphire became friends far too quickly, even if Sapphire is a very friendly individual - it felt... artificial. Instead, I've added 4 chapters between 1 and 15, that flesh out a lot more of Sapphire-Sabetha's budding friendship, and gives a calmer pace to the story while retaining the story, events, and such.
Another such event is I've changed Daniel (dan), to a HUMAN instead of an Anthro. Some are iffy about this, but I feel this was a good change - nothing made him distinctly an Anthro, and we lack a real male human presence in the story. he fits it well. Other then simple appearance change, he is still the Dan you know - except it also gives him a stronger backstory, and why he is with the Sanctuary, when in truth, he is a human - a further bridging showing that humans, Anthro, and Pokemon can indeed exist together as equals for example. :P
Across the story, I've added about 30 new chapters total, all meant to flesh out and fill in gaps that felt rushed, or to add important details that effect season 2/3 (yes, they exist! more on that in a moment).
Season 2 has been 'plotted out' chapter by chapter for the most part, and extends to an unbelievably ridiculously huge number of 272 chapters! This wasn't my goal, but simply where the story finally felt right to end, without rushing or forcing anything. You may go 'oh god, that's too much, it'll be boring!' - but i only added something if i felt it would be fresh, fun and exciting. With my ability to swap up cast members for their own various reasons across the story, it helps me really flesh out a wide variety of cast for the story and their importance in the end of it, on a more personal level rather then limiting it to perhaps 10 characters tops as I have to do in Sabetha, as we have already seen that 'chaotic' issue of remembering everyone when they were just 'side blips'.
Season 3, yes, I've already been working on season 3 of Sabetha, is taking place in the distant future after the end of season 2. Season 2 takes place about 5-6 years after season 1, while season 3, is about 500 years later after the events of it. I can't really say anything here due to spoilers, except to address the concern of people saying I'm going too far ahead. The fact is, I feared that too. But if I have something in season 3, that has a tie back to season 1 or 2, I need to go back and add that. If season 1/2 are still in 'note' form - it's very easy to just add a note to add it when I write the chapter involving it. But if those seasons are already written out in detail, I could possibly need to alter hundreds of chapters to correct it each time I need to have something tie back into the past of the story, which inevitably means, I waste a lot of time and lose enthusiasm for doing something as redundant and pointless as this!
By doing this, going 'ahead' and planning to some good degree what the future seasons will do/have for plots, I can then write any events that are important into the past seasons as I go, and have a very clear goal and guideline where i am going with each, giving me a very strong path of guidance for writing which is something I dearly lacked for season 1 Alpha.
Now, back to Season 1 talk. (God, I talk a lot ;p). Let me make this blunt and simple.
Would you prefer I...
A) Go back, and rewrite season 1 as I envision it?
B) Skip season 1, and begin writing/publishing season 2?
You may wish me to go and finish Tremi/Gilte's 'love arc' - but if you add a shining diamond to a steaming pile of shit, it's steaming pile of shit with a diamond in it. :P (yes, that's crude and poor to describe it, but I'm on a caffeine high and can't think x.x!). To be clear, that 'scene' is one of the new scenes I have plotted out for season 1 - one of my favorite in truth. :)
So yes. pretty much I am very happy to see people speak out about the story and enjoying it. I really would like to start writing it again, but I really don't know how many people would actually care if I did. I only kept going prior, because of the ravenous fans who pushed me to keep going and do better, not because I had to - because I wanted to. Rally the hordes, raise the banner of the legions, and cometh to my aid, legions of Sabetha! Let me hear your voices! ;)
You can PM me here, if you wish to talk more privately, or to ask for my Skype or similar to talk about this. :)
I've actually been giving heavy consideration to starting Sabetha again (writing that is, I've been 'story writing' it almost daily for a year+ now, on and off fleshing out things as I get ideas and thoughts). Maybe I'll give it a whirl in the next few days, see if I can get that flare back...
Hello SabbyKat! ^w^ I'm a long time reader of Sabetha and hadn't had internet access since your work was posted on agnph. I was pretty put out upon finding the old fic section was shut down and that your work was never transferred over to the new one.
I just wanted to say how much I loved your work and to ask you if you ever planned to post the chapters (before or after they were re-edited) for download or on a different site.
I never actually finished the posted chapter, as I ended up stopping due to the fact that I couldn't find the much awaited (by me at least) lemon between Tremmi and the Gallade ( who's name eludes me) and I'm really starting to miss it, like a good novel you lost halfway through and just can't seem to find. :(
on top of that I recently suggested the series to my girlfriend, who was initially reluctant to get into anything anthro, and, after finding them posted here, really fell in love with the characters, much like I did, and has, quite intimately, enjoyed the more lemony parts of the fiction.
I know you don't know me and definitely owe me no favors, but I really would appreciate it if you consider what I had to say. It just upsets me that my girlfriend and I, not to mention your other fans, cant enjoy your story.
of course if you've been over this before, I apologize for wasting your time and would like to request a link to the discussion in question. Thank you for taking the time to read this.
I'm not done with them yet, sorry if it came off like that. I'm still very much nit-picking over it and working on season 2/3, which all have roots in season 1. I need to make sure all the lead ups to events in 2/3, have some basis from 1. I can't do that unless I know what will happen in 2/3! :P
though I am planning to tackle actually rewriting the first season beginning june or so.
If you, or others know somewhere I could go to find similar-minded individuals, who would perhaps help and criticize my work before I begin, I would likely be willing to begin before that. But the main issue is, I wanna improve even more before I start writing again so it's not a 'slight improvement' - but damn near a new story almost.