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Can't Take My Eyes Off You Ch. 11

#11 of Cant Take My Eyes Off You

Here's the latest installment of my series. Hope you enjoy it. It took me a while to write, but i am pretty pleased with it's turnout. And its christmas break now, so hopefully i'll be able to write two more chapters. Anyway, enjoy. :)

I heard a voice calling my name. "Kausn." I looked around, finding the place vaguely familiar. Then I realized that I was in a recording studio in the Wolfe Records building. I tried to call out to find someone, but my voice stopped at my lips when I looked down. I looked down at myself, and a shock ran through my body. NO FUR!?!? I held a hand up to my face and sure enough, it was a human hand. I looked down back at my body, seeing that I was completely human. But how? Not that it really mattered though. Suddenly, I felt something on my shoulder. I turned around to see Seigi standing behind me, his paw resting on my shoulder. He was still a wolf, and there was a look of anger and sadness in his eyes. When he spoke, anger coursed through his body and came out in the form of words. "Kausn, I can't believe you would do that. I thought I loved you." I tried to speak, but Seigi put his paw to my mouth. I squirmed, trying to get away, but his other hand came and held me in place. I looked into his eyes, and now all I saw was hurt. I didn't understand what had made him so sad, but I felt it was my job to comfort him. I went in to give a hug, but when I tried, he moved away. I fell into the air, and I expected to hit the ground, but instead I kept falling. The floor seemed to open up and let me fall in, and I seemed to fall forever. I soon saw the bottom approaching, and fast. I closed my eyes and waited for the impact, but it never came. The next time I opened my eyes, I saw Seigi looking down at me and calling my name.

"Kausn, wake up."

"What?" I mumbled, still drowsy from the nap I just took.

"We're here." Seigi kissed my head, and got up out of the car. I looked around, and then looked down at my body. A feeling of disappointment and sadness coursed through me. I'm still a fur. Why should I be sad about that, though? It's what I wanted, isn't it? I started to doubt myself, but before I could get too caught up in my thoughts, Seigi poked his muzzle back into the car. "You coming?"

"Yeah, I'm getting there." I scooted my way to the door, swinging my paws out and standing up. I looked at the restaurant, savoring the beauty of the old, rustic style place. I looked at Seigi, and he smiled at me, gesturing me forward. I walked through the doors, and wondrous smells hit me from every direction. That's what I loved about this restaurant. You could almost live off the smells, not having to eat a single thing. I looked around, and I saw Alex in a booth, waving at us, and a smile on his face. We walked over to him, greeted him and sat down. Alex noticed our collars and instantly inquired about them.

"So, why do you guys have collars now? Are you going to get married now?" His tone was filled with sarcasm, but little did he know that he hit the nail on the head. I smiled and spoke next.

"Yes, Alex. These collars signify a bond between us that is like marriage. We are planning to get married, but we aren't sure when yet. We're just going to take it one step at a time." I looked at Seigi, and he smiled back at me. Something isn't right. We stayed like that for a moment, and I tried all I could to analyze him. He was smiling, but his eyes told a different story. They showed someone who had been hurt, someone who was afraid to love anyone other than himself. His eyes made me feel like I hadn't done my job as a lover. Is he really unhappy with me? I turned away from him, trying to hide the emotions I was feeling. This just sprang on really abruptly, all this sadness and mistrust. Is he hiding something? What's happening to our relationship? Apparently Alex could feel the tension between us, because he coughed loudly, making both of us jump. He spoke, trying to diffuse the awkwardness.

"So, what's it like being, ya know, Furs?" His question didn't take me off guard, but I didn't really expect him to be so forward about it. Seigi wasn't making any move to answer, so I spoke up.

"Well, it's not really too different from being human. Yes, we have fur and a tail, but that's about the only differences. Oh, and all the stares you get walking down the street." I shrugged the last one off as a joke, but deep down, it really bothered me. I always wondered why people couldn't just accept the fact that furs were here to stay, and there was nothing different between them and us. Some people were just so ignorant.

"The reason I ask is because, well, I want to become one, and I was hoping you guys would help me out with that." What Alex said shocked me a little. Both Seigi and I were staring at him, our mouths slightly agape. I've never really heard of anyone who wanted to be a Fur. Seigi was the first one to speak.

"Now, why the hell would you want to do something like that? You want to give away your normal life just so you have the novelty of saying you have fur, that you stand out in a crowd? Trust me; you don't want to do that." Alex's answer seemed confident, almost well rehearsed, like he expected a question like that to arise.

"Well, it'd be no worse that what it is now. I'm stand out in a crowd everywhere I go, I'm just different. I don't want to do it for the novelty; I want to do it because maybe I can finally feel I belong somewhere." I saw a tear roll down his face, and I was very tempted to give him a hug. His answer seemed, though well rehearsed, entirely truthful. I could see that this kid just wanted to fit in somewhere, and he thought becoming a Fur was his last option.

"Listen Alex, I know you think you may want it now, but five years down the road, you may regret it. We were kind of forced into this life, and it isn't always enjoyable. It is so much different than being just another human. It will cost you jobs, money, and maybe even a good education. Trust me; you don't want to force this upon yourself." I gestured down to my body. He seemed to process what I said, but was still persistent on becoming a Fur.

"I know that it has consequences, but I'm ready for them. I really, really want this." He stared at me with pleading eyes, and I sighed. I couldn't help but give in. I mean, who was I to deny this kid what he so desperately wanted?

"Ok, but I'm not exactly sure how to transform you any other way than to give you what the doctors who transformed us gave us, and that place no longer exists."

"Don't you have anybody that you could call?" His question brought up a good point, like he knew very well that I did have someone I could call. His name was Dr. Dan, and he was really the only person we trusted in that God forsaken complex. He managed to escape with us before the complex was demolished, and we had kept regular contact up until recently. He was the only person that was generally concerned with our well-being. I pulled out my cell phone looking for Dan's name while I talked.

"I do have someone, but I don't think he'll have anything on hand. He might be able to help, but I'm not sure how much help he'll be able to give." I found his name and pressed the call button, bringing the phone up to my oversized canine ear. Seigi and Alex then began engaging in conversation, and I smiled, glad they finally were talking to each other. After three rings, I finally heard a click and a deep, male voice came on the line.


"Hello, Dr. Dan? It's Kausn."

"Kausn! It's been a while. I actually just wanted to call you. How've you been?" He seemed generally happy to hear from me, but something else was there too. Something that sounded like anxiety.

"Well, I've been doing pretty well. How have you been?"
"Oh, ya know, still doing the same thing every day. So, what can I do for you?"

"Well, there's this kid that wants to become a Fur, and I was wondering if you could help?" The line was silent for a few moments. "Dan?"

"I'm sorry, Kausn. I just wanted to make sure I heard you right. You said that there was a kid that wants to become a Fur?"

"Yes, that's right." The line was silent for a few more moments before Dan spoke again. "Well, there's two ways for a person to become a Fur. The first way is to do what you guys went through, but that's impossible now, seeing that the complex was destroyed."

"So what's the other way?"

"Well, it is quite more intimate. The other way for a Fur to exchange bodily fluids with a non-Fur. That will make the non Fur transform into a Fur."

"So what your saying is that one of us has to............. Has to fuck the kid in order to make him a Fur?"

"Basically, yes." I was shocked at this news, but I couldn't help but let out a giggle. "What's so funny?" Dan's voice was slightly defensive, like something he said made me laugh.

"Well, it just seems so.... so science fictional, like something you'd hear in a horror movie."

"Well, I hate to compare it to this, but it's like AIDS. You can catch the 'disease' by the exchange of bodily fluids."

"Well, I'm sure Alex will be glad to hear that." Alex glanced at me when I said his name, but soon went back to the conversation he was having with Seigi. A waitress came, but Seigi shooed her off, as I was still talking on the phone.

"Kausn, I have to ask you something."

"What is it?"

"Who was the one who came out first?" My heart skipped a beat.

"What do you mean?" I was afraid of what his question was, and sure enough, the question I didn't want him to ask, was the one that he asked.

"Who came out to the other first? You or Seigi?" My mouth felt dry and I stuttered.

"Se.....Seigi did. Why? How did you know that we're a couple?" He laughed a little before he spoke.

"I may not be the most up to date on celebrity gossip, but two gay Furs proposing to each other at a concert is bound to grab my attention." My ears went flat against my skull.

"You already found out?"

"Sadly, yes. Websites are all over this. Anyway, the reason I ask is because I have some very unfortunate news to tell you." My thought were running a mile a minute, trying to figure out what he was about to say.

"And that is?" My voice was slightly shaky, because I had no idea what he was going to say.

"Well, our research has indicated that in most recently changed Furs, attraction to the same sex has occurred 99% of the time. But sadly, after about 2-3 months after the initial attraction, that said attraction starts to deteriorate, leaving the said Fur with no attraction with the same sex. You said Seigi was the first to come out? In all of our tests, the person that came out first will be the one to have the deteriorating attraction. Basically, soon, Seigi won't love you anymore. He won't feel attracted to you in any way, and may even become homophobic, in extreme cases. Are you following me Kausn?" I wasn't sure I was, but I was still trying to wrap my head around this.

"So, what your saying is, Seigi will stop loving me? You're basically saying that our love is doomed?" Seigi turned his head at this, looking at me with confusion on his muzzle.

"Basically, yes. You guys will start to fight more and more, until finally Seigi ends it. It usually ends with one person still loving the other, but that other can't stand the first person. I'm sorry, but yes, your love is basically doomed." I looked at Seigi, and a tear started falling from my eye.

"And you're sure this will happen?" My voiced cracked a little, but right now, I didn't care.

"It's happened in every test subject we've had. I'm sorry Kausn. If I could do something, I would. We just have to hope that maybe for you two, it's different. It may very well be different, since you guys have been close friends for many years. All you really can do is hope. I'm sorry, but I have to go. If you need to talk, or something happens in the next few days, please, call me. I have to go Kausn. I wish you the best of luck. Goodbye." With that, the line went dead. I pulled the phone away from my ear. Slowly, the weight of what he said dawned on me, and I fell into Seigi. Tears were flowing from my eyes with no signs of stopping. I felt a paw on my head, smoothing my head fur, trying to calm me down. It only made me sob harder as I thought about the possibility that this type of comfort will slowly slip away from me.

"Shhhh. It'll be alright. Shhhhh. It's ok." Seigi words soothed me a little, but I was still sobbing slightly when I pulled away from him. He looked at me with eyes that cared, but they weren't the same. They lacked the love that had been there once before. He still cared about me, but I wasn't so sure he loved my anymore. I started crying all over again, but this time, instead of falling into Seigi, I fell onto the table. The tears flowed effortlessly from my eyes as I realized that maybe what Dr. Dan said was true, that maybe Seigi didn't love me anymore. When I finally calmed down, I looked up and saw both Alex and Seigi staring at me. I regained my composure and spoke in a soft, barely audible voice.

"Seigi, you heard most of the conversation, but I'll tell you what Dan said anyway. He said that all of his subjects experienced attraction the same sex, but soon, that attraction will cease to exist. He said our love was doomed. He also said that the only way to change someone into a Fur is to exchange bodily fluids with them." Seigi sat quietly through what I said, and seemed to ponder my words before he spoke.

"Kausn, trust me, our love is not doomed. Yes, it has its rough patches, but that doesn't really matter in the long run. You're the one I want to spend the rest of my life with. Don't you ever doubt that. And, for Alex, who do you want to do it?" I looked at Seigi, but I could tell he wasn't telling me something. I thought about asking him directly if Dan was speaking the truth, but I didn't want to hear that he was. The thought of losing Seigi scared me, and it was almost unbearable to think about. Some unknown force made me ask him anyway.

"So, is Dan telling the truth? Are you feeling less attracted to me?" He shifted uncomfortably is his seat, and I knew before he said it what he was going to say. Tears were forming fresh in my eyes before he spoke.

"Lately, yes, I've been feeling less attracted to you. I'm sorry Kausn, but I just can't help it. I find my eyes wandering to others. It makes me feel really bad, but I need to be honest. I still care for you, but I'm not sure how much I love you anymore."


That hurt. Badly. I almost got up and walked out, but I somehow kept my composure. I spoke in a soft voice, analyzing every word before I spoke it.

"Thank you for being honest. As for Alex, I want you to change him. I don't think I could do it. I'd feel too guilty." I hoped that Seigi would pick up on the not so subtle message in my sentence, and sure enough, he did. His ears dropped and his tail sagged. When he spoke, he sounded like he might cry.

"Kausn, couldn't we just inject some of our blood into him? I mean, that's exchanging bodily fluids, right?" I pondered this sentence for a moment.

"I suppose so. He did say it was similar to AIDS. We could give it a try." Seigi's eyes lit up at the suggestion.

"Well, let's do that then. Let's go back to our hotel and see if it works." He grabbed Alex by the arm and rushed out of the restaurant. I got out of the booth and walked after them, leaving a tip on the table, even though we never got around to ordering our food. When I got to the car, Seigi almost pushed me inside, anxious to get going. I sat in the middle of Alex and Seigi, Alex staring out the window, Seigi resting his head on my shoulder. He definitely has his mood swings. In the restaurant, he tells me that he may not love me, and now he's resting his head on me? Maybe he's fighting it more than he lets on.


After about 20 minutes of driving, we finally got to the hotel. Alex and Seigi went straight up to the room, while I was the more sensible one and went to the reception desk and got our key. When I arrived at our room, they were both waiting outside the door, chatting each other up. I went up and opened the door, and they both rushed in, seemingly eager to get this over with.

"Now, I really don't want to be a part of this, so Seigi, you can do it. Besides, I really don't like needles. So, just go into the bathroom, get the syringe in the first aid kit, take out some of your blood, and inject some into him. If his transformation goes like ours did, then he should start about a minute after the injection. Have fun." They both walked into the bathroom and I sat on the couch, going over everything that happened tonight in my head. Ok, so we met Alex, he told us he wanted to be a Fur, and then I called Dan. He told me that Alex could become a Fur, and he told me that my love with Seigi is doomed. Really, I think he's fighting it, just for my sake. I'd rather see him happy with someone else than miserable with me. Isn't that what love is about. Set them free, and if they really love you, they'll come back? I sat for about twenty minutes debating this, when finally a yelp brought me back into reality. I looked at the source of the yelp; the bathroom. I figured that Alex's transformation was almost complete, and decided I better go check on them. I walked over to the bathroom door, reaching down for the knob, and slowly turning it. The door swung open, and my jaw almost instantly dropped to the floor. Standing in the middle bathroom were two Furs, Seigi and a fox, their maws wrapped in each other, their tongues exploring the others mouths. The sight made me almost vomit.

"WHAT THE FUCK is going on here?!?" My sudden entrance and booming voice made them jump and pull away from each other, a strand of saliva still connecting them together.



I still felt bad for what I said to Kausn at the restaurant. I mean, I still cared for him very much, but that spark that we felt at the beginning didn't seem to be there. I still loved him, but I wasn't sure how much. I tried to sort out my mixed feelings by resting my head on his shoulder on the car ride here, but in the end it made me more confused. Alex didn't help at all either. Alex has been flirting with me all night, and I didn't make one move to stop him, even though I'm technically engaged. My emotions were all mixed up, and I felt like a terrible person for putting Kausn through all this. The last thing I needed was to be alone with Alex. But, as fate would have it, that's exactly what happened. Now here I was, getting ready to draw blood out of me and inject it into a human who so desperately wanted to become a Fur. I found the syringe with no problem, and was getting ready to draw out some of my own blood.

"Seigi, I just wanted to say, thank you for doing this." Alex looked up at me with a warm smile, and it made me feel all warm and happy inside. I instantly pushed this feeling away as I thought of Kausn. Why does everything have to be some damn confusing? It really shouldn't be confusing. I should know that Kausn is who I belong with.  I looked away from Alex and back at the needle in my paw.
"Don't mention it." I felt a small prick as I felt the needle push into me, and I drew out about 1 ml of blood. I felt slightly woozy, but that was to be expected. I looked at the blood, noticing that it was slightly darker than regular blood, and it was definitely a lot thicker.

"Alex, I feel slightly sick, and I don't want to screw this up, so I'm going to give you the syringe. You're going to have to inject yourself."

"I'm fine with that." He took the syringe away from me and slowly poked it into his skin. The blood supply in the syringe depleted until there was finally nothing left. We both waited in silence, waiting for the changes to come. They hit suddenly and without warning. His skin started to move and shift slightly, and soon, long, thick hairs started sprouting from his skin. He started to itch profoundly, complaining that he felt like he was on fire. Suddenly, he let out a small scream as a tail started to form at the base of his spine. I heard sickening cracks as bones started to shift, making his figure transform form human to something more along the lines of a canine. He was panting and screaming, and all I could do was watch.

"Seigi, please help me. Do anything to take the pain away." He looked at me with tears in his eyes. My body reacted before my mind did. I walked over to him and planted a kiss on his newly forming muzzle. His eyes went wide with shock, but soon closed, enjoying the moment. I closed my eyes, not wanting to see his transformation. I felt his muzzle push out more, and I felt fur when he wrapped his arms around me. I felt his tail form the rest of the way, and start to swish around. When I finally opened my eyes, there was a pair of yellow eyes staring back at me. We still hadn't broken our kiss, and his transformation was complete. Standing in front of me was a fox who was about 5'9, and just about the most beautiful creature I had ever seen. His chest was completely white, and orange fur surrounded the white. The tips of his ears were black, and the tip of his tail was white. When we broke our kiss, his smile was as big as the ocean. "Thank you for doing that Seigi." Despite his physical changes, his voice hadn't changed at all. I expected that to be the end of it, but apparently Alex didn't. He wrapped me in another embrace, pressing his lips forcefully to mine, which caused me to yip slightly. I hesitated before I let his tongue into my mouth, and as soon as I did, I instantly felt guilty. Kausn would never do something like this to me. The kiss became more passionate, and I was starting to get into it. I didn't even hear the door swing open, and I didn't realize Kausn was standing right there until his booming voice cut through the small bathroom.

"WHAT THE FUCK is going on here?!?" Alex and I jumped apart, but a strand of saliva still connected us together. I looked up at Kausn, and saw nothing but hurt a betrayal in his eyes. I wanted to run over there and give him a hug, but I doubt that he would even let me after what he saw us doing. When he spoke again, he was on the verge of tears for about the third time that night. "Seigi, I trusted you. I never thought you'd be the type of person to do something like this. And you!" He pointed at Alex, anger rising in his voice. Alex didn't seem phased by his anger, and seemed to even feed off of it. "How dare you come in here, asked to be changed, and then try to take my boyfriend! You're a slut, and your new form certainly backs that up. I want you out. Now." Kausn's voice seemed commanding, a side of him I'd never seen before. Despite the command to leave, Alex stood his ground.

"Face it Kausn. Seigi doesn't love you anymore. He wants something exciting, something new. You're just old news. Now, if you don't mind, Seigi and I will be going." He started to walk out, but I stayed where I was. Does he really expect me to drop everything and go with him? He looked back at me expectantly, slightly annoyed. He turned around, standing halfway between Kausn and I. "Seigi, you have to make a choice. It's either Kausn or me. So, which one is it?" I didn't expect to be asked this question so suddenly, and my mind was working overtime, trying to decide. Why is the decision so hard? I shouldn't have to decide. Kausn is the one I vowed to spend to spend the rest of my life with. Besides, he's my first. Doesn't that mean anything? But when I kissed Alex, the spark that Kausn and I had was there. It was so......... so exhilarating. He is something new, but is he what I want? WHY IS THIS SO CONFUSING?!?! Kausn could see my inner turmoil and looked at me with understanding eyes, which hurt even more. He clearly still loved me and cared for me. He was so understanding, so right for me. I looked at Alex, and he looked back at me expectantly. He looked like a little kid, waiting to open his presents on Christmas Day. His eyes still spoke of sadness, but they were also understanding, which made what I was about to say even harder.

"I choose.............. I choose Alex." Kausn's tail and ears dropped, and his eyes filled with tears. He walked over to me, and wrapped me in a final hug.

"I understand. I wish you the best Seigi, I really do. I hope you'll be happy with him." He whispered into my ear, and I could tell he meant it. We pulled away from each other, and he stood in front of me, his eyes full of tears and compassion. I took the collar off my neck and placed it in his paw. I looked at him, and our eyes spoke an entire conversation without having to say a word. I then leaned in, and gave him one last kiss. It was just a tender one, but I wanted him to remember it. When I pulled away, tears were streaming down his muzzle, but he was smiling slightly, which made me feel even worse. I walked over to Alex, and he walked beside me, trying to grab my paw, but I kept swatting it away. When we reached the door, of the hotel, I turned around, getting one last look at Kausn. He was standing in the bathroom, crying, clutching my collar to his chest. I gave him one last look before I closed the door behind me.



I saw the door close, and my heart broke. I thought about yelling after them 'He doesn't really love you Seigi! He just wants you for your performance in bed! He's an actor!' But something inside me held me back. I ran to the couch, and plopped down on it. What did I do wrong? This is the worst Christmas ever. I looked up at the clock, and I realized that it was Christmas Day. And I can't even spend it with the person I love the most. That sent me into another round of tears, which lasted for hours. The entire time, I clutched Seigi's collar to my chest. I didn't really blame Seigi for all of this, though. I really blamed Alex, because he was the one that stole Seigi from me. He knew exactly how to get Seigi alone and somehow seduced him into thinking that they loved each other. He outright stole him from me, and I couldn't believe I didn't see his plan ahead of time. I knew that Seigi still loved me, because something was still there. If he didn't love me at all, he wouldn't have hesitated in his answer. I could understand why he chose Alex though. Alex was something new, something exciting, where I was just boring old me. We'd been dating for a little while, and the initial spark just wasn't there. It needed to be rekindled. The next time I looked up at the clock, it was 5 a.m. All of the pain from last night had been thoroughly emptied, replaced with nothing but hatred and spite towards the person that stole my boyfriend. I was done with crying, done with all the self pity. It was time to do something. He underestimated just who he was stealing from. There is nothing I do better than Revenge.

Ok, now its time to get all you lazy readers involved. One of two things can happen. Do you want:

1) Kausn tries to get Seigi back and repar their relationship and engagement


2) Kausn gets revenge on Alex and just leaves Seigi to find someone new.

You can either PM me or comment with your decision. Choose well, my fellow furs.

Griffin_92 2 years ago 0
I couldn't find the correct words for this....godlike Chapter.
Drama, Feeling, Fights, Revenge...
I'm so beak stand open and i cry a liitle bit.
Love and hate you at the same time for this story part.

Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Should i be happy or offended? haha Thanks man, really means a lot. I'm glad you seemed to like it. :)

trailstoride 2 years ago 0
*cringes* Damn, talk about turning up the drama. I hope Seigi comes around to his senses. Alex is just using him and Seigi doesn't see it. I really feel for Kausn. His world was just turned inside out. The only glimmer of hope is he can see that Alex for what he is.

The OTHER Guy 2 years ago 0
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Catperson 2 years ago 0
I still think it goes too fast...

marriage proposal --> breakup in what, like... 5 hours? I just don't feel it when it's that quick.
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Well, it was supposed to come out of the blue. It wasn't really supposed to have any real buildup to it, besides the restaurant. I think it really puts the reader on edge, not knowing what will happen next. I do admit, i move it along quickly, but then there's never a dull moment, ya know?

Catperson 2 years ago 0
I know, you're trying to keep the story fast-paced and exciting, but I feel like it takes away from alot of the impact. When you're pumping 2 or 3 new plot elements into every paragraph, it just doesn't feel very meaningful. It feels "efficient". That's kinda what I'm trying to say.
DavidFolfy 2 years ago 0
I hope Alex gets what's coming to him. If I were kausn I would have beat the living shit out of him. And fuck seigi. what a spoiled slut. Hope kausn does what i would do and put his feeling and passion into music and make tons of money out of it and find someone who can really appreciate him and truly love him. Then seigi will spend the rest of his life running off with "new" people and end up dying alone while kausn experiences true happiness :)

Sorry about the paragraph haha I just wanted to rant about how much I hate seigi and Alex right now haha.
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Trust me, Alex will get whats coming to him. But maybe not in the way that you think. And regarding Kausn's feelings towards Seigi, all i can say is Kausn doesn't want to see Seigi hurt. That's why he let him go in the first place. And paragraphs are fine. They make me feel loved. :)

DavidFolfy 2 years ago 0
he may not want to see seigi hurt but that's definately what he deserves lol. At least Alex will get whats coming to him :) even if it's not the way I hope, in the end you reap what you sew :P

and thats good because i love your story, being a musician myself. so expect more paragraphs haha XD
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Well, there is a fine line between what someone deserves and what's is just plain cruel. Trust me, by the next chapter, you may feel just a little bit of sympathy for Seigi.

Yay! More paragraphs!
DavidFolfy 2 years ago 0
While this is true, cheating and leaving someone you are engaged to puts people like seigi on a permanent blacklist. Having been cheated on, I know how devastating it feels. Personally I'd spare no expense in making seigi's life a living hell. But hey that's just how I would handle it. I tend to go out of my way to be a good person, but that is just unforgivable. Either way I'm very excited to see how things turn out and see if seigi deserves a second chance after the stunt he pulled ;P
Grayscales 3 months ago 0
Wow you posted this two years ago but I still want to put in my two bits. I would never be able to take the "high road" like Kausn tries to do. Death Metal and revenge would be my life. It's probably for the best that Kausn isn't like me.
FarmWolf 2 years ago 0
Awesome! I signed in and saw this and something made me click it. Glad I did! I'm going to work my way through from the beginning.

I have no problem with changing narrators but it is a bit confusing as to who is narrating. Perhaps putting the narrator's name at the beginning of each section where it changes?

Otherwise, keep up the good work!
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Well, im glad that you clicked it. :) I hope you enjoy the series.

I tried to make it as straightforward as possible without saying their names directly, but i think i may do that. Thanks for reading. :)

Rerue 2 years ago 0
Wow quite an interesting twist there at the end. I have to agree with kiyiya and say that it did felt kind of fast and sudden. I also have to say that it all felt a little too convienent about how Alex stole and became a furry. I like the allusion to Better Than Revenge at the end though xP.

During the part when Seigi was narrating, you really didn't come up with a good argument for going for Alex. It sounds kinda biased where on one hand you have this awesome guy who loved you and will always love you and occasionally have hot sex, on the other you just get new hot sex. I dont think you developed a good enough relationship between Seigi and Alex for Seigi to suddenly split in the few minutes that Dan hold conviently told us he would stop loving Kausen.

I kinda felt that ending was kind out of character for Kausen. He's too nice of a guy to actually plan or want to plan something so devious. What happened to the Kausen that was thinking earlier that if you loved something, set it free. He even said that he would rather have Seigi be with someone else and happy rather than miserable with Kausen. I mean yeah love can make us do crazy things, but this kind of seems like a complete 180 turn there. Yeah I can see Kausen hating Alex and never wanting to do anything with him ever again, but getting revenge? I can't see the kind -although broken- hearted Kausen doing such a thing. Oh well, they're your characters not mine.

I personally would love to see Kausen get revenge cause it is just plain awesome to read, but I think that Kausen trying to win back Seigi would be more realistic. From what I gather so far about Kausen and Seigi, I would expect Kausen to mope for a few days almost committing suicide several times and Seigi going with Alex for a while and later so overcome with guilt that he realizes that he was meant to be Kausen and comes crawling back to him. Then when Kausen opens the door to his apartment with a tub of ice cream in paw and sees Seigi in a tux with flowers and chocolate, he would accept him lovingly and have hot steamy man on man sex right there on the floor or dump the ice cream all over Seigi and the story would proceed with Seigi trying to win Kausen back until they make up and have more hot steamy make up sex. Thats just my opinion though xP

PS: sorry for the long wall of text and criticism.
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
It was a little convenient, but Alex would have stolen Seigi whether he turned into a Fur or not. It was really sudden, but it was supposed to be unexpected. There wasn't supposed to be any real buildup, it was just supposed to happen. And Yay!!!! Someone got the song reference! :D I was listening to that song the entire time I wrote this, and It seemed to fit well at the end of this.

During the part where Seigi was with Alex, it was supposed to be kind of sudden. Where as Kausn will love Seigi, Seigi doesn't feel the spark that he had when they first started dating. Where as with Alex, he felt that spark. Now, Seigi still cares for Kausn, but his love has been diminishing. That's why they have been having their fights. With Alex, Seigi feels something that isn't there with Kausn. Now, if it's actually love or just something new to fuck is what you'll have to wait and find out.

The ending. Well, it is slightly out of character, but love makes us do some crazy things. Well, the Kausn from earlier didn't expect that Seigi would actually do something like cheat on him and leave him so suddenly. It was a complete 180 flop, but wouldn't you be mad if someone you barely knew came in and stole the person you loved the most from you. He is broken hearted, but you can't be kind all of the time. Sometimes, things just snap.

Well, who says he can't get revenge AND get Seigi back? I like your idea, but i have something else in mind. It will make it just that more sweeter that Kausn gets revenge on Alex.

Long walls of text make me feel like i actually am doing something right. It lets me know that people are actually thinking about my story, and it actually shows me that people want to get involved and argue. It makes me feel I've done my job as a writer. Criticism is needed. It keeps me in check. I hope you're enjoying the story so far. :)

FarmWolf 2 years ago 0
"1) Kausn tries to get Seigi back and repar their relationship and engagement OR 2) Kausn gets revenge on Alex and just leaves Seigi to find someone new." I'm not sure it's that simple. I've only read the first chapter and this one and maybe I'm misremembering what I have read. So please correct me if I am mistaken about something. I know Kausn has been knocked for a loop emotionally in this chapter, but did he not hear Alex asking Seigi to help him with the pain of transformation? [I just reread that part carefully and realized that Kausn saw their second kiss, Alex having seduced Seigi.] It is quite understandable for Kausn to be upset seeing his mate kiss someone else. But could this be a result of the transformation effects? How soon does the Male/Male attraction occur? If Seigi stops caring for Kausn because of the effects of the transformation, might Kausn stop caring for Seigi for the same reason? What about after? Might they be able to be friends again and see where it goes? And Seigi might dump Alex very soon if he is still coming down from the artificial(?) attraction to other males. How far apart were Seigi and Kausn transformed? And were they gay before the transformation? That said, these are your characters, and perhaps I'm missing some facts as well. Anyway, just thought I'd throw in my 2 cents. I'll PM you with my vote. Keep up the good work and take care.
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Well, I lt was supposed to be that Kausn was so lost in thought that the world just got tuned out. M/M attraction doesnt occur until about a month after the transformation, but I hinted that Alex was gay before he transformed.

Reguarding the deterioration of love, I stated that in all the test, the person to first realize attraction will be the person that stops loving the other. As to ur other questions, I can't answer them without giving away future happenings in the book. Sorry. I can tell u tho that both Seigi and Kausn were transformed at the same time, and neither of them were gay. Another reason only one person feels the deterioration of attraction is because Kausn's attraction is pure, while Seigi's is just hormones and some genetics talking. The hormones eventually dissapate, leaving that person unattracted to the same sex. Hope this helps. :)


p.s. Sorry if something doesn't make sense, I'm using my iPod. Damn autocorrect!

P.p.s reguarding they were both gay before.", I forgot to mention Seigi was a little more "open minded". Not gay persay, but willing to try anything. That also helped his attraction to kausn. I wrote a whole other story that explains their transformation and stuff, but I didn't post it because I didn't really like it. Maybe I will someday tho.
FarmWolf 2 years ago 0
Okay, that's kind of what I thought. I always like to find out whether I'm on the same page as the story's author (pun intended!)

I'll be interested to see where the story goes from here.
Kausn_Husky 2 years ago 0
Well, im glad your interested. And haha, love the pun. :D
Eyesok 2 years ago 0
Well that was one of those things you couldn't see coming(well I didnt lol). I love the chapter and the way you did things. I felt extreamly sad when I read this chapter lol, Poor Kausn. Hopfully Kausn doesnt have revange on Alex because Revange is worse than any other killer sickness out there. Thou I really do hope Kausn gets his wolie back :) Love the chapter now off to read the next :D
Furriesrule 2 years ago 0
Fox thief 1 year ago 0
I have mixed emotions for this chapter i need a minute *gets up grabs bow and arrows and cloak and walks out the door , muttering "Damn Alex, Boyfriend stealing, cock sucking, meat beating asshole"* sorry for the language Alex just pissed me off i'm not really mad at siegi but he still irritated me at the end because Kausn really loved him and he just left aaaahhhh!!! bad things always happen to good furs
Kausn_Husky 1 year ago 0
I know how you feel. I'm glad this chapter turned out the way it did. Probably one of the few that will stay mostly the same.
tsukishiro626 1 year ago 0
OH MY GOD. WHAT??? I just wanna hug Kausn forever. Wow....I totally did not see that coming. It actually makes e really sad. I know this probably doesn't apply anymore, but I really want them to get back together, even though Seigi has hurt Kausn so many times.
Kausn_Husky 1 year ago 0
:P It'll always apply. :) I know, but Kausn isn't perfect either. He hasn't exactly been a Class A boyfriend. :P
tsukishiro626 1 year ago 0
Very true. It's actually very real in that respect.
Kausn_Husky 1 year ago 0
:) Thats what I really aimed for. :)
Grayscales 3 months ago 0
As a half dragon, I would have no problem taking a few or more bites out of Alex if I were in Kausn's shoes.